Vision Meetings

Welcome to the Vision Writers webpage.

We meet on the first Sunday of every month, Feb – Nov.

Venue: Brisbane Square Library
266 George St,
Brisbane Queensland
Australia 4000

The meeting room we use is 1.9

Time:
11:00am – 2:00pm

If you’re thinking of coming along to a meeting, consider joining the VISION Discussion List (Yahoo! Group) to check on meeting times and ask questions.

More details and exact dates can be found on the Meeting Times page.

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Too Much Of A Good Thing

darkest-depths-ebook-smallToday was a pretty funny meeting. Unintended innuendo had me laughing so hard there were tears in my eyes. It was also a touching meeting, with our lovely VP taking the time to bolster the confidence of another member. It’s touching to know we’re all in this together, and we’re all determined to make sure that our fellow members have the strength to move on. It was also a monumental meeting as we finally uploaded our latest anthology Darkest Depths (more on that later).

Amongst the hugs, tears, and cheers there was still critiquing though! The takeaway from today’s meeting is a problem that some writers probably wish they had. None the less it can be a story killer. The issue is too many ideas – in one story.

Sometimes (like in the opening chapter this feedback was given to) it’s a case of lots of cool and interesting ideas, but so many of them, in such rapid succession that the reader feels overloaded. Another possibility in the same vein can be a case of several ideas put together that don’t really mesh well.

With the first form, one possible fix is to spread out the ideas so they don’t came so thick and fast. What simply must be included in this scene for readers to understand and be drawn in? What can wait for another scene or even chapter?

The second possible fix is applicable to both forms of the problem. Ask yourself which of the ideas you can’t live without? Which are you most passionate about? Which can the story not survive without? Cut the others. If there’s still too many, go with the answer/s to the last question only.

Don’t be too scared to do this. Removing those ideas doesn’t mean you have to bin them completely. When you’ve finished this story you can write something that might better work with the discarded idea/s.

You know what there’s never too much of though? Awesome short stories. If you’re looking to sate your short story fix consider grabbing a copy of Darkest Depths, our anthology celebrating 20 years of Vision Writers meeting and critiquing.

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Writing Prompt: First Line Fun

photo credit Melinda Seckington

photo credit Melinda Seckington

Take your favourite book. What’s its first line?

We’re going to use that as the base, but here’s a few rules.

  1. Try not to work in the same genre as that book.
  2. None of the characters can be facsimiles of the characters from your chosen book.

Now, you need to take that line and change it a bit. Give it a new tone. If it was an optimistic line, make it dark and gloomy. If it was a ‘dark and stormy night’ your line could become something like ‘it was a brilliant golden dawn promising a glorious day’.

You don’t have to go polar opposite though, you can go on a tangent. Dark and stormy night becomes ‘a blustery afternoon were a simulation of early dusk came from oncoming storm clouds’.

Use you new line and go crazy.

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Filter Words

As always there was a wealth of good advice at the meeting. It can make it very hard to choose what to write about in these ‘meeting takeaway’ posts. This month I’d like to talk about filter words.

Filter words are quite nefarious, as they can seem like they’re drawing the reader into the story when actually they’re putting an extra layer between the reader and the experience.  That bit of distance is – strangely enough – the character.

For example:

“He felt the snow gather on the back of his collar” vs “The snow gathered on the back of his collar”

or

“She wondered how to avoid it” vs “It seemed unavoidable”

The first sentence is telling the reader what the character is feeling or experiencing, whereas the second sentence is letting the reader feel it directly, without putting the filter of the character’s mind between the reader and the experience. It puts you right inside of the characters body.

If you’re wanting deep POV, truly immersive writing steer clear of filter words like: thought, wondered, saw, heard, noticed, felt.

Why not open up your manuscript and use the ‘search’ or ‘find a word’ function and see how many results you get for each one of those filter words? You might be surprised at how many there are. But don’t despair, you’ve diagnosed the problem, you know the solution, and rewriting/revision is just as important a part of writing as the first draft. Go forth and revise!

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Writing Prompt: Platinum

platinum-t07-103b-wikimedia-commonsVision Writers is officially 20 years old this month. Woah! We are Brisbane’s oldest speculative fiction writers group and this is our platinum anniversary.

So fittingly this month’s writing prompt is platinum.

Just that. Platinum.

Let’s see where our active imaginations take us!

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Happy Anniversary!

birthday-cake-757102_640Wow! Vision Writers is officially twenty years old!

To think two whole decades ago Rowena, Marianne, Adrianne, and (who else? I’m sure there were others but I don’t know who – I’d love to if only for historical accuracy and the sheer joy of knowledge ;p ) sat down together, founding a writers group and critiquing one anothers work.

Having recently contacted several past attending members I’ve learned we’ve held meetings in lots of other places than just the two libraries I’ve attended meetings at, and I’ve been impressed by the breadth of work and friendliness of every member I’ve spoken to. I think that’s one of the best things about being a part of Vision Writers. Everyone is so open, friendly, and helpful.

Going to your first meeting can be so daunting, and I think though our meeting attending numbers have more than doubled in the last few years compared to when I first joined, I think the group is just as welcoming. Everyone’s eager to try and include newbies in conversation and encourage them to submit (take the plunge!).

So, Happy Birthday Vision Writers!

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Taking the Time To Savour Your Action Scenes

gary provost five word sentencesHappy Father’s Day for yesterday to all the dads out there. We had a very laid back meeting on Saturday (it was moved from Sunday to Saturday just this month so we weren’t forcing people to chose between the meeting and Father’s Day). It reminded me of the meetings we used to have when I first started, only five or six of us showing up at the meetings, the discussions and tangents we went on while giving feedback — and no time limits!

Despite there being less pieces to critique and less people critiquing there were still several good bits of advice from the meeting that are applicable to more than just the pieces they were given to.

My favourite bit of advice from this month’s meeting is related to action scenes. Chances are you’ve heard the advice to use short, punchy sentences for impact. This is good advice, but like anything, can be taken to far.

In the extreme this can result in action scenes which feel too rushed, too dry, maybe even like just a laundry list of actions taken.

How to avoid these outcomes? Don’t forget to vary your sentence length. If you aren’t sure of what I’m saying, read the Gary Provost quote I’ve used as a picture for this post.

Another way to avoid it is to add some description in. Not too much, use it like pepper, not potatoes. So let’s look at a basic scene to start: (be warned, violence ahead)

“Jason threw the rock into the bushes on the other side of the agents. The agents turned to see what made the noise. Jason burst from the bushes. He leaped at the agent on the left, punching her hard in the face. Then Jason turned on the other agent, only to come face-to-face with the barrel of a beretta. That’s when Jason took on his wolf form and tore the man’s throat out.”

OK, not bad, but it was a bit dry, a bit rushed, and doesn’t really evoke any emotions. Now let’s try it with a few embellishments.

“Jason lobbed the rock over the agents heads so it landed in the bushes on the other side of them. The two agents spun, searching for what made the sound. Jason burst from the bushes, launching at the female agent. He wasn’t a fan of hitting women, but when that woman would shoot both him and his entire family just for being what they were he didn’t struggle with the decision so bad. He slammed his fist into her face hard enough to knock her flat on her back.

Jason turned on the other agent only to come face-to-face with the barrel of a beretta. Jason swallowed hard. He only had one option left: Be what he was. A growl rolled up, past the lump in his throat, and he felt the bizarre prickling sensation of fur sprouting out all over his body. At the same time he felt the stretching and expanding as he changed size and shape into his wolf form. He surged forward and slightly to the side, past the gun and straight at the agent’s throat.”

It’s not perfect, but now we’ve got some emotional connection to Jason. We can see what he’s feeling and thinking. That helps us care about the result of the action scene. We’ve also added some more lively descriptions of the action which make it feel less like reading a bland list of actions taken. Sure it’s twice as long, but it’s a more interesting read because we’ve taken the time to savour the action rather than just rushing through.

Though don’t forget not to over-embellish. Too many details and asides can bog down your reader, detracting from the pace and tension. As usual, moderation is key.

Action scenes can be tough to master, and the only way to master them is practice, so you better get started!

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September Meeting Date/Time/Location

Out of respect for Father’s Day the September meeting has been shifted to SATURDAY 3rd September, still at the usual 11am, but now at the Communal Bar and Grill (right out the front of the Brisbane Square Library).

Meetings will return to normal from the October meeting onward.

New September Meeting Details

Date: Saturday 3rd September
Time: 11am-2pm
Location: Communal Bar and Grill

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Writing Prompt: Don’t speak

3111207407_ea37525588_zThis is less a prompt and more a challenge. Can you write a story with no dialogue?

Normally it would be a terrible mistake to have a story with no dialogue, but if you come at it from the right angle, and have a good reason it could be great. After all, we learn the rules so we can know when and how to break them for the right dramatic impact.

Don’t forget to think about why your characters can’t talk. Be careful to not make things boring, don’t forget the fiction staples of conflict and change to keep things interesting for your readers.

I’d love to hear how you went, and read any results. Link or discuss in the comments below.

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War and Commerce

war mapHacked Fit Bits aside, this month’s best bit of advice from the meeting is to do with deeper levels of world building.

Be warned this is a very simplified explanation of what is a large and complex topic that I encourage you to research more deeply if you are working on an ‘epic’ or ‘interstellar/galactic’ scale in your fiction, or even anything which involves two or more opposing cultures/countries.

The piece this feedback was given on was an epic fantasy (though the advice is applicable to more than just fantasy) in which two nations – a still somewhat primitive war-like one, and a more modern commerce focused one – meet and the diplomatic issues between them (the story itself is infinitely more complex than just this one fact, but to help you understand the advice I felt some knowledge of the story would be helpful).

At one point one of the members of the more modern nation made a comment about how they had warriors, but not really much of an army, as they were far more focused on trade.  But in reality, that would not be the likely case. Commerce and the strength of a country’s army are often tied together.

To use some examples from reality: look at the USA and China, both economic powers and both with strong military forces. Russia is looking to bolster it economic standing once more so is putting effort into their armed forces.

What are some of the reasons behind this? Well, war is an economic drain on a country, money that would go to trade is instead spent on the myriad expenses of war – of which there is rarely if ever any monetary return on. Also trade routes can become restricted or entirely cut off due to fighting and enemy takeovers. A country that wants to trade freely needs to be able to scare off potential enemies so they never get into a war to begin with.

Back in the fantasy world, the wealthy country had also made little to no effort to prepare for their differently cultured guests. A country who was able to successfully trade well and strike good agreements with other cultures and countries would be well aware of the value of catering to your guest’s different needs and expectations. They would also know how a whole deal could fall through because of a mistranslated phrase or an unintended insulting gesture.

Military matters, commerce, and diplomacy are intertwined and if you’re going to have political stakes in your story it would be a good idea to try and gain a better understanding of these matters. Obviously this blog post is far from all there is on the subject, so don’t stop here, learn as much as you can so your world building can strengthen your story.

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Writing Prompt: Weak Sauce

2992040209_06452e0151_mWhat makes all those monsters like werewolves and vampires so scary? The fact they’re so much stronger than us. We couldn’t possibly hope to defeat them – unless we know their weakness.

But what if those myths were intentionally misleading? Vampires want you to think they can fly, transform, hypnotise and possess inhuman strength because otherwise if you walk too close to them with your garlic breath you’ll destroy them. They want you to keep your distance out of fear. The myths are a strategic defence.

Your challenge, pick a monster (popular or lesser known) and take every single one of their strengths away. How do they live? How did they(or their ancestors) spread the myths? Let the story flow(and chat about it or link to it in the comments).

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